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Reading out loud

This focusing technique worked best for me. I find it hard to read sometimes because my mind always wanders when reading. I will read a sentence that makes me think of something I have done or seen and I space out for a bit. This technique helps eliminate that from happening. Saying the words aloud really helps me focus on what I am reading. One of the downsides to this is that it takes longer to read stories this way. I would take the loss of time for this method though. It really helps me concentrate on the reading.

Copy and delete

This method worked well for me too. The process of only reading a paragraph at a time made the story much easier to focus on. Making the comments about each section was helpful as well. When I was done reading a paragraph I made notes about them. At the end of the story I had written about my favorite character and what they had been doing throughout the story. This helped me better recollect what was in the story and what I liked about each part. This can help me leave more detailed comments on stories.

Use a timer

I liked this method as well. I loved that I was only doing something for ten minutes. It was very easy to read the story in the allotted time. I actually read it twice because I read through it fast the first time because I knew I was being timed. That rushed feeling did not help me focus much but going through and reading the story for the second time really helped me focus on the details so overall this was helpful to me.

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Storytelling: Saving Pikachu

               Ash is on his journey to become a Pokémon master. He has won many battles and trained hard to become the very best like no one ever was. He is traveling with Brock and his Pokémon. His favorite Pokémon he has is Pikachu. Pikachu was the first Pokémon ash received. They have a special bond that no one can break. They are best friends and will give everything they have in battle for one another. While traveling through Viridian forest catching Pokémon and training, he is approached by Professor Oak.  Oak tells him he is there to give him a gift for working hard on his pokedex. Ash looks with wonder at the new type of pokeball that Oak had presented to him. “It is a master ball” said Oak, “it will catch any Pokémon on the first try.” Ash was amazed and placed the master ball in his bag. Thanking Oak, he continued on his journey. A few days later Ash came across a shiny Pokémon called Diglett, shiny Pokémon are Pokémon that are a different color than what they are supposed to be, knowing that these are extremely rare he considered using the new master ball he had acquired but decided against that. The Diglett saw them and started to run away, Ash gave chase but left Pikachu behind with brock because electric type moves have no effect on a ground type Pokémon like Diglett. What they did not know was that the Diglett was a trap set by Jesse.

                Jesse had sent a Team Rocket member to distract ash with the shiny Pokémon. It was a Ditto that could transform into any Pokémon. The Diglett had went quite some distance before stopping. As Ash was ready to battle and catch the Diglett, it transformed back into a Ditto. Ash recognized the Ditto at once, knowing it was Jesse’s he rushed back to find Pikachu and Brock but it was too late. While he was chasing down the Diglett, Jesse had tricked Brock by imitating the voice of Ash and crying for help. Brock ran off to find his friend leaving Pikachu behind where it was safe. Jesse captured Pikachu and flew back to Team Rocket headquarters but Pikachu let out a cry and Ash looked up and saw Pikachu being taken by Jesse. He had to collect his strongest Pokémon for the upcoming battle. He traveled to the nearest Pokémon center to retrieve them. Once he did that, they set out towards Team Rocket’s base. Knowing the location of their base he began traveling there, with Brock, immediately.

                Jesse had returned to headquarters with Pikachu and everyone was thrilled to have such a strong Pokémon. The only downside to this was that Pikachu would not listen to anyone. Pikachu was loyal to Ash and only obeyed him. Jesse tried everything to coerce Pikachu into taking her commands but nothing worked. James knew that Pikachu would never listen to her and tried to convince Jesse to give Pikachu back. He knew that Ash would come to rescue Pikachu and that nothing would stop him. This made Jesse furious and she threw him out of headquarters. He then joined Ash and Brock and told them of a secret way into the Team Rocket base. They follow him and find Jesse and Pikachu. Ash sees Pikachu and know he will win for his best friend. Jesse knows how strong he is so she prepared for this. The battle was long and well fought each used their Pokémon flawlessly in battle but it came down to Charizard and Arbok. Charizard was the strongest Pokémon Ash had, besides Pikachu, and he took the Arbok down with ease. Jesse still had one trick up her sleeve though. Jesse explained that she had the legendary Pokémon Mewtwo under her control, although she had not caught him. They were using mind control to subdue this Pokémon. Mewtwo was too powerful for Charizard alone so thinking quickly Ash commanded Charizard to rush at Mewtwo using flamethrower. This distracted Mewtwo long enough for Ash to throw his master ball unnoticed. It hit Mewtwo and captured him, rendering Jesse defenseless. After defeating Jesse he freed Pikachu and they were happily reunited. Before leaving he made sure that James was in charge so that this would not happen again. Ash, with Pikachu by his side, continued on his journey to become Pokémon master.

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 The Divine Archer by F. J. Gould 

Author’s Notes:

My story is centered on the conflict between Rama (Ash) and Ravan (Jesse). Rama begins this story exiled from his kingdom and he Sita (Pikachu) are traveling through a forest. A deer appears and Sita wants his hide so Rama goes after it for her, leaving her in the care of Lakshmana (Brock). It was a trick though, the deer was a person in disguise to help distract Rama while Ravan captured Sita. He does and takes her to his kingdom. Rama finds out where she was taken and goes with an army (Pokemon team) to try and rescue Sita. Ravan gets angry at one of his brothers for advising him to just give Sita back to Rama. Ravan then throws Vibishan (James) from his council room and from that point Vibishan joins Rama. There is an epic battle between Rama and Ravan but in the end Rama wins the conflict and saves Sita. His exile is up at the end of this story and they return home. 

Reading Notes: Divine Archer by F. J. Gould Part 2

The Divine Archer by F. J. Gould
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In chapter 8 Ravan meets with his council and throws one of his brothers, Vibishan, out of his home because he advised that Ravan should let Sita go and not fight Rama. Turns out that was the best choice but that is not what Ravan did. So his brother joins Rama and his army. I will incorporate the brother joining Rama in my story. I think I will change how this happens though. I will make it seem like the brother who left did so secretly instead of confronting Ravan like in the original story.

Chapter 9 was about the epic battle between Rama and Ravan and their armies. This battle has a happy ending and I will not change that for my story. The hero will win and rescue the girl. He does test Sita's faithfulness to him but that ends well too. At the end of this chapter his banishment is lifted and they return home.

In chapter 10 Rama becomes ruler and banishes Sita because of rumors that she was unfaithful to him while held captive by Ravan. She has twins that he does not know about until they come into the city. The end of this is a bit sad, Sita gets taken to the underworld by her own accord and this saddens Rama. I will make the ending a bit more tragic to evoke more feeling out of this part of the story.

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Reading Notes: Divine Archer F.J. Gould

The Divine Archer by F. J. Gould

I did not plan on using chapters 1-4 because I created a story about that already so I decided to use a different part of the Ramayana this week.

I will be using chapter 5 of this book for my story this week. Rama was just exiled and is wandering the forest. He comes along a saint who gives him many great weapons. This will be fun to work with but I have not decided what theme I will be using this week.

I will continue my story by using chapter 6. This is where Ravan captures Sita. I want the story to flow well so instead of using the whole chapter I will use some of the more interesting parts.

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