They arrive at the kingdom and the
news that Ahsoka had returned traveled quickly. Hamry was enraged by this and sought
to end the conflict between them. He went to the wall and commanded her to
leave. She tried to explain her side of the story again but he would not hear
it. He ignited his light saber and charged at Ahsoka. She dodges the initial
attack then activates her light sabers as well. The battle commences and neither
side was giving an inch, Hamry elegantly and swiftly attacking and Ahsoka
parrying each blow but as the battle raged on Hamry was gaining the advantage. Ahsoka
tried to attack and get on the offensive side of things but Hamry was just too
powerful. She miscalculated her attack and was vulnerable. Hamry knew he had
won but just as he started to swing his saber at her, another intervened. Obi
Wan had blocked the attack at the last second. Hamry was furious and began to
attack Obi Wan. Obi Wan countered every attack with ease and then began to go
on the offensive. Hamry could not keep up with the swiftness of Obi Wan’s
attacks and fell in battle.
After the battle Ahsoka assumes the
throne and they have a grand feast for Obi Wan. They celebrate for a few days
but Obi Wan grew restless and was ready to find and rescue Satine. He
approached Ahsoka and asked her to fulfill her part of their agreement. She
complies and sends four clone armies in each direction. The armies that
traveled north, west and east found nothing but the troops that went south
found out where Satine was. The southernmost army was disheartened at first
because they had reached the sea and found nothing. They dared not go back
emptied handed so they continued their search along the coast. Shaak Ti overhearing
their concern approaches them. She said she saw General Grievous take Satine
across the sea. Her brother was slain by Grievous when he tried to save Satine
from his clutches. The clones report this back to Ahsoka and Obi Wan who immediately
sent word for their troops to all head south. Obi Wan and Ahsoka both travel
south and join the armies. They could not cross the sea at this time because
the army who went north had not arrived yet. They had most of the ships because
they had the furthest to travel on their previous mission. So they sent Anakin Skywalker
alone to scout the area and find Satine.
When Anakin arrived he searched and
searched but could not find Satine. He thought he had found her when he first
arrived. He thought the Grievous’ wife was Sita but he knew, from what Obi Wan
had told him, that Satine would remain loyal to Obi Wan so he knew that this
could not be her. He then found her surrounded by assassin droids. He
approached Satine and told her who he was and that he was here for Obi Wan. She
was overjoyed that her love was on his way to rescue her. Anakin offered to
save her then but she knew that they would never make it. She told him to give
Obi Wan her bracelet as a sign that she was still alive. Anakin then returned
back to Obi Wan with the gift and the news that Satine was still alive. By this
time the extra ships had arrived and everyone boarding for the mission.
They arrive to Grievous’ kingdom
and find Grievous’ droid army waiting for them. The battle commences and Obi
Wan and the clones have the edge and are winning the battle. Until nightfall
approaches and the droids heat vision takes full effect. They can easily see
all the clone troops in the dark and start slaughtering them. Then Count Dooku
throws a volley of rocks and boulders onto the battlefield gravely injuring Obi
Wan and the other survivors. A dense fog covered the field when Yoda arrived.
The cover disabled the droids heat vision and during that time Yoda healed all
the troops including Obi Wan. Dooku sees this and in an attempt to demoralize them
conjures up an image of Satine and stabs it in front of Obi Wan and the army.
Before the agony swept in, Anakin told him of Grievous’ love for Satine and
knew that he would not have ordered Dooku to slay her. Obi Wan rushes Dooku,
killing hundreds of droids in his path, and confronts him. They begin to duel
and during the fight a sniper took out Dooku. This enraged Grievous and he
charged into battle. Grievous met Obi Wan and their battle commenced. Grievous
using two sabers to combat Obi wan. Obi Wan was gaining the advantage on
Grievous until he activated his two extra arms. Now wielding four light sabers,
he was nearly unstoppable. Ahsoka saw this and threw one of her sabers to Obi
Wan. The clash continued and the battle was glorious both exchanging the
fastest and strongest attacks anyone had ever seen. In the end Obi Wan slashed
off three of his arms and stabbed him through the heart. Winning the battle he
and Anakin rush to Satine. Finding her, he embraced her in his arms promising
to never let her go again. They then departed for Ahsoka’s kingdom to live out
the rest of their lives.
Image info- Lightsaber
Source- Obi Wan's lightsaber
Author’s Notes:
This story focuses on a battle between two brothers, how
Rama helped one of them, and his search for Sita. Rama (Obi Wan Kenobi) is summoned by Sugriva (Ahsoka
Tano) to help defeat his older brother Vali (Hamry Tano). I changed the sex of
the youngest brother to a female in my story. Sugriva explains how the conflict
started and Rama agrees to help in exchange for help looking for Sita (Satine
Kryze). They go out to fight the brother and Rama helps Sugriva defeat Vali.
After the battle some time was spent celebrating but the search for Sita must
begin. Sugriva sends four armies in every direction to help find Sita. They
discover that she is across the sea in Ravana’s (General Grievous) territory.
Hanuman (Anakin Skywalker) goes across the sea to scout the area and look for
Sita. He is discovered and released. They cross the sea and the battle
commences. Rama and his forces seem to be winning until night comes and the
rakshasas gather their full strength also Indrajit( Count Dooku) badly injures
Rama and tricks him with an illusion. The battle commence again after everyone
is healed by Garuda (Yoda). Rama and Ravana start battling soon afterwards and
Rama slays him and wins Sita back.
Bibliography- Rama and the Monkeys by Geraldine Hodgson
Hey Ryan! Great Story! I like that you had a Star Wars theme to the story, I think it was a great way to show the relationship between the characters in the Ramayana! I really enjoyed your story! I think something that could make your story even better is if you incorporate some dialogue into it. I would love to see how the characters talked to one another! Overall, you did a great job! I can’t wait to see what you write in the future!
ReplyDeleteHey Ryan,
ReplyDeleteYour take on the story of Rama and his brother and tying it with Star Wars is awesome. I really liked how you used great imagery words within the story that really show what is unravelling in the story. When you talk about the creature that his "five times her size" you could almost see what the creature might look like. The character that resembled Sita was a good representation but I wonder how different the story could be if her part was explained more in the story. Along with the rest of the story that had great imagery, you could also incorporate background information. If you added a little more about some of the characters then readers are more likely to rally around your story's character and the cause. Otherwise you did an amazing job taking the amazing Star Wars into a story like you did!